Casualties of War
(1) Casualties of War (Sentinel)
By Fyresong
Reviewed by Kathryn A on 18th December 2000 (6)
The summary for this was intriguing, so I thought I would read
it. I should have been warned by the author's disclaimer that she had
only seen a handful of episodes and read a ton of fan fiction. Or
even more so, that the first episodes she saw were Sentinel Too parts
1 and 2. She seems to have taken Jim's behaviour in those episodes as
the norm, and laid all of the blame for the events there completely at
Jim's feet. At least she makes him angst well enough. But it's a
pity, because it wouldn't take all that much work to fix the
characterisation here. Simon is inconsistent too, with one breath
he's worried about Jim, and with the next one he's blaming him.
There are some things that don't really fit. For example, here's Jim
recalling one of those fateful conversations with Blair:
("Oh, hey, I was down at the station doing some work and I met this
woman . . ."
"Look Chief, why don't you spare me the details?")
Blair HAD tried to tell Jim, to tell him about Alex, he realized
grimly, guiltily.
The problem with this is simply that there is no way that Jim could
have deduced from what Blair actually said that he was trying to tell
Jim about Alex; combined with the high improbability of Jim actually
remembering that conversation word-for-word anyway, considering how
much he had on his mind at the time, it's not fair to pile guilt
on Jim about it.
That's just one example.
One also has to watch out for the occasional typo, but apparently the
author is dyslexic... but maybe she needs to get someone else to
proof-read it, then, considering that she's aware of the problem.
The other thing to be aware of is that this is not a complete story;
it continues in the next one.
(2) Covert Operations (Sentinel/Stargate)
By Fyresong
Reviewed by Kathryn A on 18th December 2000 (7)
Reading this, I felt I had ended up in a weird parallel
universe where doppelgangers abound - people who look exactly the same
as the people you know, but they are actually completely different.
Not only is Simon more techy than I can believe, the Major Crimes gang
are Blairphiles to the nth degree, Jim is an utter asshole (whereas in
the real universe he's only a 50% asshole at worst), but Blair has
been replaced by an ex-military covert operative on a hair-trigger. I
know! Someone cast a perfection spell (like in that Buffy episode) on
Blair!
The pity is that if it had been more in character, I might actually
have liked it, what with the dreams and visions and phone conversations
between Jim and Blair. If only the author could refrain from bashing
Jim every other page, and had made Simon more like Simon and as for Blair,
it might have been an interesting idea if it weren't completely and
utterly unbelievable. The irony of that is that I have actually read
one story where the author explored the question "What if Blair hadn't
been lying when he said 'I flew Apaches in Desert Storm' in _Siege_?"
and it was more plausible than this story. So it wasn't so much the
fact of Blair having been in the military that was the problem, but
having Blair be a SuperBlair who could out-covert Jim Ellison that
was unbelievable.
The author's note at the end annoyed me too; I don't like being
blackmailed into giving feedback.
(3) Standard Operating Procedure (Stargate/Sentinel)
By Fyresong
Reviewed by Kathryn A on 18th December 2000 (8)
This is the companion piece to "Covert Operations", from the
Stargate point of view. One can tell that the author has a better
grasp of the Stargate characters than she has of the Sentinel ones,
though there is a touch of Stargate fanon here too, and I don't really
think that General Hammond actually thinks of Daniel the way that he
does here. There's also a bit of a rushed feeling in this, it felt as
if Daniel put things together a little too quickly.
But I did like the bit where the SG folks assumed that the Tahuantinsuyu
had a technological solution.
The story had potential.
(4) Broken Soldiers (Sentinel/Stargate)
By Fyresong
Reviewed by Kathryn A on 18th December 2000 (9)
Well. It seems this author isn't content with the
unbelievable, with distortions that swing all interpretations of Jim's
character into the worst possible light (and making Jim go around with
his foot permanently in his mouth) -- she's now descended into
outright lies in her campaign against Jim Ellison.
And I quote (Blair's PoV):
"Weren't they partners, even if Jim never admitted it in public except
that first time as a joke to Joel?"
That is a complete fabrication. Jim has called Blair his partner on
plenty of occasions, and not as a joke. (If you're curious as to how
often and in what way, read my article "Blair Sandburg: Anthropologist
-- and what else?" on my Sentinel web page, Sentinel & Guide).
Even if she hasn't seen that many episodes, the transcripts are freely
available to all on Becky's site, so she is without excuse.
The other thing that gets me about this is that both here and in the
earlier encounters that Jack O'Neill has with Jim, she makes Jack
immediately jump to the conclusion that Jim is a cold-hearted bastard,
without any evidence whatsoever. This, IMHO, is doing a disservice to
Jack, who not only knows what the military life can do to grind the
warm-heartedness out of a person, but knows, from the inside, what
being a cold-hearted bastard is, because that was the way he was after
his son Charlie died (ref. Stargate the movie); and therefore is one
of the most likely people to actually have some sympathy towards Jim
even if Jim really was such a cold-hearted bastard as he's being
painted to be.
I wonder, after reading this, exactly what fan fiction the author
had read, that she liked so much. She seems to have avoided
everything which speaks of the love and friendship between the guys,
instead portraying two guys who hate each other bound by an instinct
that they can't escape.
Why on earth is the author bothering to write about characters that are
so horrible? The way she portrays Jim is like an atheist talking about
God; if Jim was really like that, I wouldn't be a fan of the show!
Why doesn't she just kill Jim and get it over with?
No matter how much I like Sentinel/Stargate crossovers, I simply can't
read any more of this... defamation. I cannot trust the author not to
get into another orgy of Jim-bashing, even though by this story Jim
and Blair have supposedly patched up their differences.