DobbyElfLord

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Altered Destinies (Harry Potter)

Reviewed by Kathryn A on 21st May 2009 (6)
Tags: Novel, AU, Time Travel, Changing History
Characters: Harry Potter, Tom Riddle
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Summary: Harry has defeated Voldemort, but it was a costly victory. Aberforth Dumbledore presents a plan to go back and kill the infant Riddle, but Harry will have to stay there 10 years. Can Harry alter the wizarding world's destiny? WWII and Grindelwald

This was an intriguing idea, marred by a poor execution.

The characterisations were too simplistic. The writing style was flat, with narrative info-dumps interspersed with bits of dialogue; there was too much telling, and not enough showing. The occassional spelling mistake didn't help either (at least one example of "there" which should have been "their").

I kept on wondering when something interesting would happen. Then I realized that interesting things were happening, it's just that they weren't told in a way that kept my interest. So I gave up at chapter 7 (out of 39 chapters). Others may have more fortitude than I.